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Sweet Enemy

by BisonGreen

DescriptionA sort of a first attempt at a more 'serious' type of poem.

Posted: 21.02.12  |  Last edited: 21.02.12

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I went out under cover of darkness
I went down in the dead of the night
To bury my oldest hatchet
To finally make things right
 
My journey is a long one
And I have many miles to go
We both agreed to meet upon the spot
That only we would know
 
But in my conscience there’s a whisper
And it rises to a roar
It screams about my history
And a past I can’t ignore
 
I remember what this person did!
And what she put me through
Her betrayal was a lesson
That beat me black and blue
 
The heartbreak and the petty lies
Forever changed my life
Anger consumed my waking thoughts
Self-pity filled my nights.
 
But I was just a child then
With no idea of what to do
I was foolish
I was headstrong
Yes I was guilty too.
 
In the dimness of the twilight
I see the fountain where we first met
And in the weakness of my vision
I make out a silhouette
 
A pale blue spills across the sky
As the morning makes its move
And a ghostly light falls upon the sight
Of a picture from my youth
 
And there stands my sweet enemy
Time hasn’t touched her eyes
We laugh
We cry
We apologise
All my anger
simply
dies.

Comments

Jeanna Godfrey

Tuesday, 21st February 2012 | 06:11 pm

Member | Points: 498

Hi Bison

Well done. You've got it off your chest! At least you can see both sides of the story now.

Regards Jeanna

Amy Barry

Tuesday, 21st February 2012 | 06:18 pm

Member | Points: 1350

A great read, enjoyed this.

XAmy

Twydell

Wednesday, 22nd February 2012 | 11:01 pm

Member | Points: 2067

Hi Bison !!

 

I very worthy first attempt at serious my friend !!!

Great flow, nice imagery and an interesting storyline !!!

 

very enjoyable read, thanks for sharing,

 

Kind regards,

Steve.

susanna Dunne

Thursday, 23rd February 2012 | 12:13 am

Member | Points: 6482

Hi Bison

I loved this

A really fab piece

Well Done ;-D

Kerkedijk

Thursday, 23rd February 2012 | 10:02 pm

Member | Points: 5030

Bison,

A really great poem, the expression of pain, hurt of a loved one so well done, great rhyme, wonderful story as I read, built and constructed perfectly and then the end.....all your anger simply dies, so good and not expected. Now for the sequel, we need to know what happened after thisthumbs up M x

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