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DescriptionSometimes it can all get too much for us !! This is a poem of A Mental roller-coaster.....

Posted: 25.01.12  |  Last edited: 25.01.12

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Yesterday was dreadful I was trapped within a box,
With shadows pulling at my wits telling me I’m lost,
The air was thick with misery devouring all that’s bright,
But in the blackness of my cell I knew I’d see the light.
 
Today is a better day my mind is all for me,
Darkness has departed and has let the light go free,
My soul no longer heavy, my thoughts no longer black,
Bar that constant sense that soon they’ll all be back.
 
Tomorrow is a mystery an empty space in time,
Where demons could be lurking to feed upon my prime,
Or white spirits may be gathering to guide me to the light,
Not know do I what’s waiting? be it dull or be it bright.
 
I am a prisoner in my mindset I have no self control,
Some days I could be free and others in that hole,
I seek the key for freedom that will open up a door,
To a mental state of happiness where darkness is no more.

Comments

susanna Dunne

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 12:39 am

Member | Points: 6138

Hi Steve

I can Relate to your Brilliant Poem

Well Done Sir ;-D

Fantastic! Thumbs Up ;-D

Twydell

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 12:51 am

Member | Points: 2010

Why thank you kind lady !!! blush

Glad you enjoyed it ....... I think its one of those poems that you have to expearance to understand it !!!

 

Thanks for taking the time Susanna !!!

Kind regards,

Steve

Greeneyes77

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 01:16 am

Member | Points: 818

Steve,

What a write!  Surely everybody has experienced this mental

turmoil, I know I have, all my life so, you are not alone my friend,

remember you are NEVER alone.

Isn't poetry wonderful, especially when you can write as you do.

Cudos my friend,

Colette

Smurf

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 09:10 am

Member | Points: 104

Rivetting stuff Steve. I remember as a young man suffering depression and being so frightened because I thought I was going mad.I will never forget the utter desolatiion and loneliness.I could not tell a soul as I was afraid I would be locked up and as a result 'The black monster'haunted me for years;appearing and disappearing when least expected.
Thank God that day is long gone.
Well done,
S

Kerkedijk

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 09:54 am

Member | Points: 4924

Wow Steve, this is just so powerful and the photo with it is incredible. I have suffered from depression and it is a dreadful place to be. You have captured it so well here. I was also very ashamed of the stigma of it but no longer afraid and that has released me from such darkness. I am so grateful for a good life now. Shocking blackness of depression is real suffering. I also get days when I am afraid it is coming back. Today is one of them but I have to cancel someone who brings me down, she insists on being part of my life and I have learned now to say NO. I have to go now and do that and my stomach is churning but it is important for my wellbeing. Love this verse, full of the feelings of overcoming the pain and fear, well done.thumbs up A great poem. Maire x

 

 Today is a better day my mind is all for me,
Darkness has departed and has let the light go free,
My soul no longer heavy, my thoughts no longer black,
Bar that constant sense that soon they’ll all be back.

Amy Barry

Wednesday, 25th January 2012 | 01:53 pm

Member | Points: 1284

Steve,

 

Wow, this is so brilliant this write. Well penned!

Good work!

XAMy

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 12:35 am

Member | Points: 2010

Greeneyes77 (Colette)

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment,

Yes I agree !! Poetry has helped me more times than I can remember, the main thing I have learned over the years is to vent feelings in any way you can ..... Thats why sites like this one are fantastic, and many people like yourself inspire and comfort !!!

Again, thank you for your time.....

Kindest regards,

Steve.

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 12:41 am

Member | Points: 2010

Hey Smurf !!!

Yes unfortunately depression is a hard thing to come to terms with, I remember the doctor telling me and I laughed at him !!! I thought I had the strongest, toughest mind on earth ?? How wrong I was !!!

Having an outlet and good friends and family Helps no end !!!!

Thank you for your honesty, and for taking the time to read and comment......

 

Kindest regards,

Steve.

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 12:50 am

Member | Points: 2010

Hi Maire !!!! 

I hope things worked out OK with your friend ??

I'm so glad you enjoyed this write, I wrote it some time ago while on a low, and it helped a great deal at the time !!!

I'm sure you have read the other replies I have left so I won't repeat myself roll eyes

Poetry is a fantastic therapy !!!! The stanza you chose is my favourite too ..........

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment,

 

Kind regards,

Steve. 

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 12:53 am

Member | Points: 2010

Hi Pat !!

I challenge you to write anything close to it ???

Thanks for reading and for your in depth comment,

Kind regards,

 

Mr Twydell

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 12:56 am

Member | Points: 2010

Hi Amy !!

Agh thank you !!! blush I'm glad you enjoyed it !! Poetry from the heart is the best stuff I think ??

 

Thanks for reading and for your very kind comment.....

 

Kind regards,

Steve.

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 08:23 pm

Member | Points: 2010

Yes I am "Angelas" and will be for many a year to come !!! 

Author Sax Rohmer was a very talented artiest, and I am honoured that you have given me a nick name of one of his character !!! Also the moustache in my profile picture was a temp thing to raise money for mens prostate cancer !! So once again thank you for noticing....

Kind regards,

Mr Twydell

Tiny

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 10:15 pm

Member | Points: 689

Hi Steve

I totally get your poem.

The turmoil and torment of life and living it some days.

The presentation with the picture was fantastic.

As for Angelas Arse...............she is depriving some village of their idiot. I dont have the time or the patience for people like that.

Well done Steve

Treas x

Twydell

Thursday, 26th January 2012 | 10:21 pm

Member | Points: 2010

Hi Treas !!!

Thanks a million for reading and leaving such a nice comment !!! 

I'm so glad you liked it ...... 

And don't worry about our imature little friend, We are all well able for him/her !!!! 

Kindest regards,

Steve.

Nightstar

Wednesday, 1st February 2012 | 12:56 am

Member | Points: 166

Can really identify with this, being at the mercy of the moods and vagaries of the mind. Been through this myself a lot especially in my youth.  Led me to start reading self-help books and psychology and positive thinking books, to try and exercise some control over my mind.

Can recognise my own struggle here, but I would never have been able to articulate it in a poem as well as you've done here.  Very well done !

Twydell

Wednesday, 1st February 2012 | 01:07 am

Member | Points: 2010

Hi Nightstar !!

Thank you so much for reading,

and for taking the time to leave such an honest and kind comment !!!!

 

Kindest regards,

Steve

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