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Pacific Moment

by Amy Barry

DescriptionShe gazes at the jet across the sky...quells a shiver. Love write

Posted: 15.02.12  |  Last edited: 15.02.12

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Pacific Moment

Amy Barry

 

 

 

 

 

She hangs out the clothes,

watches them dance in the breeze,

mind wanders,

peace to her thoughts,

 

a jet crosses the blue sky,

hides behind clouds,

sprinkles

long-lasting contrails,

 

the afternoon breeze

lulls overworked senses,

forgets

time all together,

 

 

in the autumn grass she lies,

cradles to her bosom his letter,

stirs memory,

quells a shiver.

 

 

 

 

10/10/11

 

 

8.13am

 

 

 

 

 

 

Comments

susanna Dunne

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 04:11 pm

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Very Beautiful Amy ;-D

Amy Barry

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 05:49 pm

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Thank you Susanna!love

Ed Coyle

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 07:38 pm

Member | Points: 379

Nice poem, nice & good use of 'showing' instead of telling.

Maybe a suggestion would be a connection to the jet above in the sky; would the lover be flying away to pastures anew? Leaving a letter and only memories behind?

 

This site is despairing me. See no posts to the Forum threads.

Not sure will this go up online.

Howya Susanna.

Ed Coyle

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 07:41 pm

Member | Points: 379

Nice poem, nice & good use of 'showing' instead of telling.

Maybe a suggestion would be a connection to the jet above in the sky; would the lover be flying away to pastures anew? Leaving a letter and only memories behind?

 

This site is despairing me. See no posts to the Forum threads.

Not sure will this go up online.

Howya Susanna.

Ed Coyle

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 07:44 pm

Member | Points: 379

That above short piece took about 5 - 10 minutes to upload.

Twydell

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 08:05 pm

Member | Points: 2067

Howdy amy !!

 

Very nice !! very nice indeedy !!!

great imagery and smashing flow .......... An enjoyable read.

 

Thanks for sharing,

 

regards,

Steve.

Amy Barry

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 08:23 pm

Member | Points: 1350

Hi Ed,

Lovely to have your visit. It is a pleasure indeed.

Thank you for your comments, appreciate very much.

Cheers Ed!

Amy

 

 

PS...Am not sure why you keep writing Susanna's name here?...

Amy Barry

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 08:26 pm

Member | Points: 1350

Howdy to Ye too Steve,

Thank you as always for the read.

Cheers

 

XAmy

3010sANTHONY

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 08:59 pm

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good stuff Amy makes me think of world war movies and top gun sort of stuff

Amy Barry

Wednesday, 15th February 2012 | 09:34 pm

Member | Points: 1350

Ha ha Anthony! You re gas indeedcheekyYes...those "DEar John...stuff, haha!

 

Thank you for the read!

XAmy

Kerkedijk

Thursday, 16th February 2012 | 10:49 pm

Member | Points: 5030

Amy,

Loved this poem when I first read it and felt the freedom and lightness of heart in it once again. Lovely.thumbs up x

Amy Barry

Friday, 17th February 2012 | 10:56 am

Member | Points: 1350

Thank you, Kerkedijk!

 

Hugs,

Amy

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