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First Light

by Leonard

DescriptionWelcoming a new day

Posted: 29.11.11  |  Last edited: 30.11.11

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first light

 birds awakens into song

music welcomes dawn

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Kerkedijk

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 10:10 am

Member | Points: 5030

Leonard,

Lovely one again and I immediately see a tightening in the first line to set the scene.

 

first light

birds awaken into song

music welcomes dawn

 

I will run away now before you give me a slap!!!

James F Linnane

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 08:20 pm

Member | Points: 2179

A nice write Leonard well done James

susanna Dunne

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 09:03 pm

Member | Points: 6481

Lovely Images here Leonard Wow!

Leonard

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 10:14 pm

Member | Points: 499

Kerkedijk,
Thanks for your feed back and it is appreciated and therefore no slap required.
Do you not need 5 syllables in the first line?
Leonard

Leonard

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 10:15 pm

Member | Points: 499

Thanks James, I am glad you liked it.
Leonard

Leonard

Tuesday, 29th November 2011 | 10:16 pm

Member | Points: 499

Thanks Susanna, I am glad you liked it.
Leonard

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