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"Men that had seen her drank deep and were silent."

Dominic drove in the evening light and wondered.

Was it Austin Clarke?

Those ten words had followed him through the guts of three decades, several relationships, an infinite number of rendez-vous. Impermanence, he had grasped, was the common thread.

DId it matter who had penned that exquisite line? Wasn't it the words, after all, that had mattered most, and not the mortal soul who had harboured them and then released?

And where had the poet harboured them? In his heart? In his head? His psyche? His Spirit-self? His pen? His pint?

His thoughts formed a circle and danced playfully around him.

To look this sort of thing up was the responsible thing to do. But to shine a light on words might prove fatal to their magic.

Why did this line carry the weight of gold within it, when not one word was in itself remarkable?

He turned off the road and parked near a forest clearing. It was almost dark. He wished to release the line, the way pigeons are released.

He wished to consider more pressing matters; his children, his missing dogs, his current predicament, but the words stayed on, uninvited, taunting Dominic as the wet leaves refused to crunch beneath his travelled feet.

This was both his curse and his gift. Beauty arrested him until madness released him. Beauty always waited - in a word, a smile, a shape. Some tangled combination always lurked to take him in - even the quiet held no silence.

 

 

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Liked this lots Rob

well done Thumbs up

this is both lovely, as a prose poem, and just so easy to stay with, i thoroughely enjoyed it, and ive read it more than once, and will again, i find it delightful, wel done ROB, ben

Rob, I read it, re-read it, made a coffee and read it again, every time the reading revealing more and more.

"Beauty arrested him until madness released him."

A great line, and I thought that is a fine line for any writer to come up with, and it was that, which made me re-read this.  And then it starts to unfold: the tale.  His missing dogs; his predicament.  And so my mind went a wandering and I took in the those ten unassuming words at the beginning and read again.

By jove - and I could be a million miles off here - he is a murderer of women of beauty, compelled to do so by the magic, or evil, of the assemblance of these words.  He knows he could stop, when he says he could shine a light on the words and they could lose their magic, but compulsion wants that allure to remain.  His well travelled feet, when he has driven to the area, makes me think he has further to walk into the forest.

If I am wrong, I am an ass!  But even if I am, I enjoyed my take on this wonderful piece of writing, that seems - just like the magical ten words, unassuming at first until you delve deeper into it.  This is one of the most exciting pieces I have read, that has piqued my imagination to run riot with the scene you have expressed here, Rob, and for that I thank you.

Cheers, Rob, damn fine piece; damn fine indeed.

Bobby

Hi, Bobby.

 

Far be it from me to say that you are wrong or not wrong.

 

Those things hadn't swam up to the surface of my mind, but yes, they are indeed all there, like flowers, suggesting themselves before actually coming into bloom.

 

I was awake until the early hours when I wrote this piece, and sometimes that triggers more "out-there" stuff....don"t you find?

 

I like writing that sets the imagination moving.  A piece doesn't need to clobber us over the head to make sure we are there!!!

 

I must find you and read more of you....being new, I tend to still mix people up, but I do appreciate your kind comments.  Rob.

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