How do I know what I think until I see what I say?
Life in Latin
DescriptionLatin holds the basic ingredients for all language, that's about it. I just wanted to try something other than poetry so this is a mini attempt at something different, comments of any sort accepted
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Felix and Tristis are passing through the Medius highway
They have seen a sign for Alicubi Primum and Nusquam
Felix Looks good don't ya think
Tristis Nah its probably miles and there wasn't even a direction or distance
Felix Yeah but its nice out, we'll get there don't worry about it.
Tristis I don't even know where Nusquam is.
Felix I like the sound of the other place.
Felix and Tristis both awoke on the road.
To the left and to the right is desert.
The sun is shinig and its warm
and a little cool breeze passes bye every now and then.
Felix I think its a dream, all i can remember is going to sleep
Tristis Its hell or limbo i don't remember anything but i know there was something
Felix I feel fine but all i know is we are here, its nice and there was a sign
Tristis I want to go back or wake up, except i don't know what or where i want to go back to.
Felix is 30, six foot tall well built nice even tight haircut, wearing
a pair of soft sandals and a pair of khaki shorts and a grey t-shirt
Tristis is also 30 he two is six foot tall but appears smaller because his
shoulders are dropped he's thin and is balding he looks older than Tristis.
Felix I wonder where this road is going to lead i think its cool,
the expectation is exciting
Tristis I just want to know what we're doing here.
Why am i dreaming and i think your who i wish i was
Felix Just keep going we'll get there and don't worry
it will sort itself out in the end it always does
Tristis Why is there no one else around or nothing else
only us and the sand, the road and the sun.
Felix The breeze is nice and hey just go with the flow there's nothing we can do
you can head into the desert if ya want i'll go with you, could be fun.
Tristis Are you mad i can't see nothing out there only the horizon
we'd probably die of thirst or starve or something might bite us
Felix we only have the road, there could be something out there that tells us something.
You never know unless you go, as the saying goes.
At least there is the two of us, imagine walking this road on your own.
Tristis No way its bad enough we are here and we have no idea of anything
WHAT THE HELL IS THIS.
Comments
Felix & Tristis ( = "Happy" and "Sad") on a "Middle" road leading to ... should 'Nusquam' be "Numquam" ( = 'Never')??
Lots of potential for schoolboy puns and/or play on words.
Be careful with spellings - Latin is a very PRECISE language!
Caesar adsum iam forte
Brutus aderat
Sed Brutus "Passus sum"
LOL
Saturday, 21st January 2012 | 11:32 pm
Anthony, Don't be too quick to 'get rid' of this, I think it could be a very funny way to "parody" the way some people OVERuse grand-sounding phrases which ultimately mean nothing at all!
The 'dog latin' quote I scribbled at the enof my first post is just one example. It is absolute gibberish in Latin (though they are ALL genuine Latin words!) but say it aloud and "think English" ..... !
Paul
Tuesday, 24th January 2012 | 05:00 am
Saturday, 25th February 2012 | 03:24 pm
It's a great idea for a story Anthony, I especially like the reveal that Felix might just be Tristan's idealised self. I just think you need to pay a little closer attention to punctuation, as there are a couple of spots where I found myself having to re-read a line or two in order to mentally insert commas or full stops so the sentence would make sense.
Otherwise, great job.
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