To Catch A Killer

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Fade into a cold day. Two men sit on a bench, wrapped up to hide from the cold air. A noisy day in the centre of the town occurs. Cars and trucks drive by. A random or two stroll past the two men.

Det. Tony:

Do you understand?

 

Det. Mike:

What am I, an idiot?

 

Det. Tony:

I wonder sometimes.

 

Det. Mike:

Hi now, that is not nice.

 

Det. Tony:

Nice? You talk about nice. It is a cold blooded world we live in and you talk about being nice? Please god shut the hell up

 

Det. Mike:

Oh, says the guy that just killed someone.

 

Det. Tony:

I did it for a reason.

 

Det. Mike

Which was?

 

Det. Tony

He was a cold blooded killer. He raped and slaughtered three women. You cannot just leave a guy like that roam the streets with freedom. What if one of them was your wife? Would you sick? Would you kill?

 

Det. Mike

I would have kill him faster than he can get his trousers off

Det. Tony takes a sip of coffee, trying to garner some warmth. Children run around in the park across the street from the two men. A woman, half dressed with a mini-skirt, winks at Det. Tony. She carries on walking, showing her vacant beautiful legs.

Det. Mike

[Giggles]

Nice legs on that

 

Det. Tony

I got a wife. A beautiful one in fact!

 

Det. Mike

Don’t mean we got to do anything huh?

 

Det. Mike shout’s at the girl, catching her attention. She turns around and wink’s again.

Det. Mike

Are you going to come back?

The woman turns around.

Woman:

Nope. I got to be somewhere.

 

Det. Mike:

Tease.

The woman carries on walking down the street. She is out of sight from the two detectives. She get’s dragged into a dark alley by an unknown man. He is hitting her off the wall. She pleaded for help, but nobody can hear her. The man slits her throat, then her drops to the cold ground. He looks around, then at the girl, and around again. The man flees the scene into the main street, leaving the girl to rot behind.

Det. Mike

She was a nice looking girl.

 

Det. Tony

Yes, a little too nice.

Let’s go

 

Det. Mike

Where?

 

Det. Tony

Somewhere fucking warm!

Comments

Hi Stevie

A great peace of Drama here ;-D

Would you mind If I mentioned a few typho's?

He is hitting her off the wall.

Stevie this is only a suggestion

Would throat sound more shocking than neck?

Ps,

I don't mean to offend you in any way

If I did.

I sincerly apologise ok ;=D

Hi Susanna,

That is grand. Any suggestions in helping is always welcome :)

Stevie.

Thank you Stevie ;-D

Thank you Stevie ;-D

thumbs up..Cheers

 

Amy

Hi Stevie !!

 

Yep I liked this too and I agree with Susanna, It needs a little more meat added to its bones,

Maybe draw out the drama a little more ??

 

A nice read, thanks for sharing,

 

Regards,

Steve.

enjoyed this steve you could really make this a lot more if you wanted you know but i like it the way it is

mind the typo's i'm always at it. it doesn't bother me cause i get the jist but some people can be a bit sticky about it

good stuff thumbs up

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